Comments on: Writing an Effective Cover Letter http://EmploymentDigest.net/2009/08/writing-an-effective-cover-letter/ News, Tips and Hints for those in Career Transistion Thu, 24 May 2012 12:12:01 +0000 hourly 1 http://wordpress.org/?v=3.1.1 By: PeteK http://EmploymentDigest.net/2009/08/writing-an-effective-cover-letter/comment-page-1/#comment-32082 PeteK Tue, 29 Sep 2009 01:15:28 +0000 http://www.EmploymentDigest.net/2009/08/writing-an-effective-cover-letter/#comment-32082 Your example: '’I'm highly concerned in playing a role and putting in my experience and capabilities to your company as your company is recognized for its excellence over the last ten years." My answer: Oh, hell no. I’m highly concerned in playing a role? You're worried and anxious IN playing a role? Really? Well, I'm not hiring nervous people today. Next! You're never going to impress a prospective employer by how well you mangle the language. Better stated: Your company has been a recognized leader in the industry for 10 years, and I am . . . . . . intrigued by the opportunity to bring my experience and ABILITIES to you at this time. . . . eager to bring my experience and ABILITIES to the table at this time. No adverbs (highly) no off beat wording, just enthusiasm and clarity. Sheesh .-= PeteK´s last blog ..<a href="http://petekandtheboys.blogspot.com/2009/09/week-of-birthday.html" rel="nofollow">A Week of Birthdays</a> =-. Your example:
‘’I’m highly concerned in playing a role and putting in my experience and capabilities to your company as your company is recognized for its excellence over the last ten years.”

My answer:
Oh, hell no.

I’m highly concerned in playing a role? You’re worried and anxious IN playing a role? Really? Well, I’m not hiring nervous people today. Next!

You’re never going to impress a prospective employer by how well you mangle the language.

Better stated:
Your company has been a recognized leader in the industry for 10 years, and I am . . .

. . . intrigued by the opportunity to bring my experience and ABILITIES to you at this time.

. . . eager to bring my experience and ABILITIES to the table at this time.

No adverbs (highly) no off beat wording, just enthusiasm and clarity.

Sheesh
.-= PeteK´s last blog ..A Week of Birthdays =-.

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